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Task 3: Enter the Pitch – Blog

18th Sep 2014
My first idea of a short film was to tell the story of ‘Ruth’ which is an interesting tale in itself. But in the back of my mind I believed that my idea didn’t have a lot of creativity to it; and it was just a retell of the Ruth’s story in a more modern setting.
As I was looking up more about Ruth and her story this led me to looking up Orpah – who is Ruth’s sister in law and Naomi’s daughter in law. Below is how the story is told in the bible:

6 When Naomi heard in Moab that the Lord had come to the aid of his people by providing food for them, she and her daughters-in-law prepared to return home from there. 7 With her two daughters-in-law she left the place where she had been living and set out on the road that would take them back to the land of Judah.
8 Then Naomi said to her two daughters-in-law, “Go back, each of you, to your mother’s home. May the Lord show you kindness, as you have shown kindness to your dead husbands and to me. 9 May the Lord grant that each of you will find rest in the home of another husband.”
Then she kissed them goodbye and they wept aloud 10 and said to her, “We will go back with you to your people.”
11 But Naomi said, “Return home, my daughters. Why would you come with me? Am I going to have any more sons, who could become your husbands? 12 Return home, my daughters; I am too old to have another husband. Even if I thought there was still hope for me—even if I had a husband tonight and then gave birth to sons— 13 would you wait until they grew up? Would you remain unmarried for them? No, my daughters. It is more bitter for me than for you, because the Lord’s hand has turned against me!”
14 At this they wept aloud again. Then Orpah kissed her mother-in-law goodbye, but Ruth clung to her.

This is the last we’re suppose to hear of Orpah which led me to then think along the lines of “What happened to her?” or “Is there more to her than meets the eye?”
The page I was on then explained about other times Orpah had appeared in legends; and I found three interesting notices (1.Rabbinic literature, 2. Midrash, 3. Good News bible):
1. Orpah is also known as Harafa, the mother of the four Philistine Giants, one of whom being Goliath. It is said her four sons were given to her from the four tears she shed when Orpah parted with her mother in law.
2. Orpah was known to supposedly be the sister of Ruth, and they were both the daughter of Moabite King Eglon.
(And then I found out the following which I, very faintly, remembered from reading Ruth)
3. Ruth becomes the Great Grandmother of David (the same David who took on Goliath, who then became one of Israel’s greatest king)

These could be good elements, to intertwine with the fact that Ruth is praised by all for staying with Naomi – and Orpah is left in her shadow, perhaps eventually leading Orpah feeling scorned to create an interesting fantasy themed tale.
My goal is to create a tale that has one particular element similar to ‘Game of Thrones’ – the characters appear to be ‘grey’ (The characters are 3D. They have depth to them, they aren’t just the ‘good’ guys and the ‘bad’ guys – there is more to them than that.)

Negatives:
– Story could be similar to the legend of Morgen Le Fay, King Arthur and Mordred – with out the incest between half siblings – and not my own creation.
– Too big a story
– Not a lot of Biblical elements with in it
– Might end up having a war over a throne too similar to Game of Thrones

Same day – Afternoon
My plan for this afternoon is make note of other sites on Orpah – so that I know who she is clearly.
I also plan to do some concept art on how I think my characters can look; as well as redo my script for my Video Plan. Also I need to come up with a new idea for my film – as well as have CLEAR visual ideas on how the story will play out.

19th Sep 2014
I haven’t done any more research or planning due to our tutor discussing another project we’ll be doing.

Same day – Afternoon
I have had a word with Paul saying that I’m worried that I can’t do the project.
Due to both the technology side of media, and the numbers of projects going on at one time. But talking to Paul helped me to realise that there is nothing to worry about.
Paul also helped me to use premier, and download videos from youtube for an assignment due in next week.

21st Sep 2014
I have done it!
My brain has finally come up with a plot to help me get from Point A. Orpah leaving Naomi and Ruth to Point B. David vs Goliath.
It is the following:
Orpah returns home and, by arranged marriage, remarries to a farmer from Philistine. Orpah gives the farmer four sons, who are born strong and tall; but the most famous of her sons is Goliath. When the Philistine King seeks soldiers for his army; he hears of Goliath’s great strength and size. Though reluctant Orpah lets her son join the army.
Soon Goliath rises through the army and becomes one of their best soldiers. The King then declares war on a neighbouring country, and Goliath goes with them.
Worried for Orpah goes to see an Oracle who tells her “a pebble will destroy your mountain”. Confused and scared Orpah heads to the battlefield to warn her son.
She speaks to Goliath who tells her that he understands her concerns – but the glory of his people is at steak. Orpah is with Goliath when a messenger tells him that a challenger awaits him, a young man named David.
At these words Orpah starts to panic; but her words fall on deaf ears as Goliath goes to battle David who is armed with a sling shot and five pebbles.

I will finalise a draft of the plot tomorrow and Tuesday.

22nd Sep 2014
Afternoon
I wasn’t in this morning due to a doctor’s appointment.
But this afternoon I have written up my FINAL idea. I also gathered some images to place, maybe in my video, in my sketchbook where I intend to put all my ideas in. (I was inspired by Guillermo Del Toro’s, Hellboy 1 and 2, Pan’s Labyrinth and Pacific rim, own sketchbooks)
After printing off my final idea, and a script for my presentation video, I headed off to find one of my tutors. And I managed to catch John – who I asked would he mind looking at my idea. Which he did, and he thought it was a good idea – but when I told him I wanted to set the story in a fantasy genre; he recommended setting it in a more modern story (as he reminded me to remember that I had to be careful with my budget).
And after thinking about my story it sounded like a son going off to fight a war; and his mother is worried for him – which is just about any war in history. But, thought I’m not sure why, my brain chose to specifically choose the Afghanistan.
I plan to put my idea into my sketchbook; and think about the modern setting. Also I’m going to talk to John again tomorrow.

23rd Sep 2014
If I ever become a high ranking Filmmaker, I am going to say when giving tips is “a film idea is like an origin story of a character; the main story is written – but then you go back and changed it; the story is always evolving.”
This morning I have being gathering pictures from the internet of wars going off in, and an overview to as to why the fights started, in Afghanistan, and Syria.
My story had a little tweak to it last night – instead of Orpah begging her son not to go, she goes to the King begging him to end the war; and let her son come home – but her words land on deaf ears.
I wanted my story to be like Game of Thrones; to show that a war, or a “GOOD” vs “EVIL” story, has more depth to it – it’s not as 2D, or Black and White, as we’d like to think.
To me seeing a war more in depth, seeing how it began or is from both sides, is an experience that is both ‘mind shattering’, in a way, and it makes you feel – for me anyway – that you can’t stand with just one side… I feel that you end up wanting to stand on the middle ground with some people.
But I think if I do set it in Afghanistan or Syria – or make up a country based on these two – I will need to be careful because writing based on wars, (and I applaud people who can write a successful story) because it’s like walking on a land mine – one wrong step and BANG!

24th Sep 2014
I have drawn up some concept art of how I am imagining Orpah and Goliath will look in my more modern setting. And I’m pretty pleased with the result. When drawing Goliath I came up with an idea on who to present David. Instead of using an actual person I am thinking of making David a squadron called, literally, Squad David.
It is a small squad, like David, but the men with in will have courage; and faith in their cause. (Just like David was a young boy who had courage and faith in his god).
Even now as I type up my progress I can see a scene in my story playing out – Orpah has spoken to Goliath, and the messenger enters the tent.

25th Sep 2014
I have started putting my video together!
I am going to be using still images and a voice over; I have had a thought about the for and against on this idea:
AGAINST – To the judges it may look very ‘lazy’ and that I don’t have a lot of camera recording skills.
FOR – Using still images will be a challenge for me. Because I will need to make the video interesting, while using ‘limited’ resources.
For this morning I plan to make a rough video outline – in note form. Then this afternoon using still photos of taken by myself, I will make my rough video outline. My plan is to film my needed footage tomorrow.
For now I will take photos of my sketchbook and any other pieces I will need for my video.
Once my photos are taken I will be starting to finish off my video for tomorrow.

Same day – afternoon:
My layout for my video has not changed – but instead I have rethought on what I am going to say. The following is:
Set in modern day Afghanistan, Orpah becomes the dutiful wife – by arranged marriage – of a farmer whom she gives four sons. As the boys grow up, they become the joy of Orpah’s life; especially the eldest son, Goliath, who becomes well known for his strength and size. Goliath has become a well known athlete, as he is a star at both cricket and football, where his strength and size makes him formidable opponent.
When the President declares war on a neighbouring country; Goliath is personally asked to join the army, as he is seen as a role model for the country and also a inspiration to other soldiers. Though reluctant Orpah watches her son join the army. Orpah is reluctant as she knows that her son may never return.
Years pass. The war, that is still on going, is very bloody and violent and only Goliath, now considered one of the army’s best warriors, is the only living relative of Orpah’s family. One evening, whilst praying for her son to return home safely form the war she is approached by a woman who tells her ‘a pebble will destroy your mountain’. By gut instinct Orpah believes her son to be in danger. Orpah tries to get word to her son and uses the help of a childhood friend of Goliath who is visiting home whilst on leave from the army…but has no success. Having had no other choice Orpah travels to Goliath’s station, and begs him to come home.
Goliath replies that he understands her concerns; but the fate of his people is at stake. A messenger then comes, and tells Goliath a small squad has been spotted near the base. As her son goes to face the enemy Orpah uses a radio at with in the base, to speak directly to the president – begging him to surrender so her son may come home. Her words once again fall on deaf ears; while on the battle field a hand grenade is thrown towards Goliath from Squad D.A.V.I.D.

I am going to speak to Paul and see what he thinks of my choice of words; and at 3.00 I’ll be recording this to use. I want to at least import the sound footage onto my video.

26th Sep 2014
Before I went home yesterday evening Harry helped me with recording my voice over – which I was very grateful for as he brought his own equipment in.
Also I’ve been talking to Harry and my others Tutors (Kash, Paul and John) showing them my idea; and asking their opinions as to what they thought of it. They thought my idea was good, and they gave me advice to make it better.
John – gave me the idea to set it in modern times
Paul – helped me to tweak my modern story to say in the over voice; so that it’s that little bit better.
The FINAL story is:
Set in modern day Afghanistan, Orpah becomes the dutiful wife – by arranged marriage – of a farmer whom she gives four sons.
As the boys grow up, they become the joy of Oprah’s life; especially the eldest son, Goliath, who becomes well known for his strength and size. Goliath has become a well known athlete, as he is a star at both cricket and football, where his strength and size makes him a formidable opponent.
When the President declares war on a neighbouring country; Goliath is personally asked to join the army, as he is seen as a role model for the country and also an inspiration to other soldiers. Though reluctant Orpah watches her sons join the army.
Orpah is reluctant as she knows that her sons may never return.
Years pass. the war, which is still on going, is very bloody and violent – only Goliath, now considered one of the army’s best soldiers, is the only living relative of Orpah’s family. One evening, whilst praying for her son to return home safely from the war, Orpah is approached by a woman who tells her “a pebble will destroy your mountain”. By gut instinct Orpah believes her son to be in danger. Orpah tries to get word to her son through the help of a childhood friend of Goliath, who is visiting home whilst on leave from the army… but has no success. Having no other choice Orpah travels to goliath’s station, and begs him to come home.
Goliath replies that he understands her concerns; but the fate of his people is at stake. A messenger then comes, and tells Goliath a small squad has been spotted near the base. As her son goes to face the enemy Orpah uses a radio within the base, to speak directly to the President – begging him to surrender so her son may come home. Her words once again fall on deaf ears; while on the battlefield a hand grenade is thrown towards Goliath from Squad D.A.V.I.D.

This morning I plan to record some pan shots of pages in my sketchbook to use in my video. Then I am going to gather pictures from the internet so that my story can be played out more simply.
I have recorded Pan shots of my sketchbook, and I also took some photos of my sketchbook pages too, with my own camera -hopefully this afternoon the mac will accept my footage and photos. Paul has agreed to find me a card reader to put my SD card in so we can download the footage. I also gathered some other images from the internet to use in my video… the only problem with is is perhaps copyright. I am going to have a word with Paul about my concerns. But before that I am going to go onto my hotmail and see if Harry has sent me my recording from yesterday (fingers crossed).

29th Sep 2014
I have uploaded the video on the website on time – but my paper work is late.
If I have the chance to resubmit then I’ll work my but off… and if not then I have to live with it.
At the end of the day I didn’t handle my time well, and that will be seen in my work.
Not the best way to start off the Uni year – only by working hard on my next project will make up for this.

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